| I just had my first read through, and I really only hvae some editting things at this point.
The section headings aren't that consistant.
Part 1 Section 4. Fighter - 5th bullet refers to Fiberglass. -- this should be out.
Part 2 Section 1.1 - refers to marshal section of handbook. other places refer to RMH. this should be consistant. will it be a separate book, or part of the same book?
Part 2 Section 1.10 - Blind attack - not defined until much later. maybe reference to where the definition is.
Part 2 Section 5.4 - Corkscrewing - reference where definition is?
1 - Part Armouring Requirements Section 9 - Padding .. we define it yet don't ever say if or when it is needed.
1 - Part Armouring Requirements Section 11 - Neck - can we define how much of the neck? ie. C3 - L2
2 - Part Weapon Requirements Section 2 - Strapping tape -- is this left in from fiberglass weapons?
5 - Part Attacks, Blows, and Target Area Section 4.3 - can we add amd and between teh two sub points? AND it should be i and ii, as it is a new section.
Part 4 (rules of the Field) pat 2 - corkscrew - can we make an addition of allowing a fighter to declare their centerline? very few people fight with thiet shoulders square to thier opponent.
Appendix 2.4 - what is the difference between a "general Offensive" and a "simulator" is fiberglass is out?
I like what's been done so far.
Mark |